Screenwriters struggle to get feedback on their scripts

“I received some feedback that my prose was novelistic and while fun to read, not what a screenplay is/should be. And that it would only hinder my success, as the story was strong, but those within the industry would give up due to the amount of prose. Now that I am on my 5000th edit, I get it, a lot of the prose is not filmable, great for actor direction, or reading, but not filmable. So as I edit it out, now I feel the screenplay is almost...bullet pointed? with this, then this, then this, then”

“Hey everyone! I’ve been working on a feature screenplay and have made several revisions, I’d love to get some honest feedback from the community. Format: Feature Film Genre: Dark Corporate Satire / Crime Thriller Length: 108 pages Pages for Feedback: 1–10 Logline: A predatory fast-food giant exploits body positivity to disguise its controversial cost-cutting practices. Meanwhile, a grieving line cook plots violent revenge against the company. A conflicted executive struggles to reform it from wi”

“SIX Half Hour Pilot 37 Pages Comedy/Family Logline: A father's plan for his next chapter are disrupted when four of his adult children are forced to move back home. I'm a fairly new writer and have a sitcom pilot that is a little too long (37 pages). Looking to swap with anyone for some initial feedback :) Main concerns: unsure what to cut, worried there is just too much content, worried it's lacking comedic tone submitted by /u/Mission_Order_7976 [link] [comments]”

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“Title: Cold Hammer Format: Short Film Page Length: 9 Pages Genres: Drama/Western Logline: A strange man completely covered in blood arrives in a small town only to be confronted by the Sheriff at the town's Saloon. Hey guys coming back with another script. Please let me know your thoughts about it. Link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/17M4zIMmh5dBikeG0-Xr7r7yh2e9kFIoh/view?usp=drivesdk submitted by /u/MatStifer [link] [comments]”

“I'm very interested how they formatted the long takes and scenes in the script format. submitted by /u/Fignootem [link] [comments]”

“Long story short, I pitched my feature film (120 pages) last year to a producer in 10mins. I met sir again, requested for any work opportunity and I have been given the opportunity to visit his office tomorrow and narrate the story in 40-50 mins. I don't know what's happening but I am feeling more afraid and nervous than excited. This is the biggest opportunity I have ever got since starting screenwriting in 2021. There are just thoughts after thoughts. I will fail in the meeting. I mana”

“Hello all! I’m looking for some honest feedback on my horror screenplay called The Pot of Plenty. It follows two sisters who discover an antique pot that grants requests in exchange for things they cherish. As their lives improve, the sacrifices become increasingly personal and neither sister agrees on when to stop. It’s a dark fairy tale about addiction, dissatisfaction, and the messy line between loving someone and enabling them. What I’d especially love to know: Does the relationship between”

“How long did it take from your upload date to find this success? How many industry downloads did you get, and how many meetings did you get from there? What has happened to your script/career since? Just curious on the success stories that have come out of the BL website! submitted by /u/LunadaBaeBoy [link] [comments]”

“Title: From friend To Dad-PDF-13 pages-Comedy Hey everyone! I recently finished my first feature screenplay, From Friend to Dad , and I’d love some feedback on the opening 13 pages. It’s a comedy about a hot-tempered, work-obsessed father discovers his longtime friend is engaged to his adult daughter, he launches into a weekend of escalating chaos that may destroy his family—or finally force him to become the father they need. I’m especially curious whether the opening hooks you, how the pacing”

“Feature Screenplay Genre: Crime comedy Page length: 90 Title: Shh , Don’t scream Logline: Two roommates struggling to make ends meet come across sudden wealth when one of them discovers an unexpected talent… Extortion . Synopsis~ From trust fund to no funds. Childhood best friends and recent college graduates Lexa and Blaze have always relied on Lexa’s wealthy family to pay their bills. But when her dad cuts her off for pursuing her passion for photography against his wishes, the two must find a”

“Just finished my second draft of this script for my Directing Class. I appreciate all the feedback I got from you guys last time. My professor and classmates gave me some notes regarding the ending and some of the dialogue, so I tried my best to address and would appreciate any and all feedback on the current version of the script. Title: The Group Chat Format: Short Film Page Length: 8 pgs. Genre: Comedy, Drama Logline: A young man spirals after discovering his friends have a secret group chat”

“Title: Quick Fixes Format: Short Page Length: 28 Genre: Comedy Drama Logline: After their group project goes missing the night of the deadline, four classmates are forced to stay at school overnight to recreate it, confronting their failing friendship in the process. Link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1C4LfcLbq-Ty6eun17uUDS6EQpk6df7Mo/view?usp=drivesdk Feedback Concerns: Pre-Shooting Draft. Any major must-fixes? I'm really curious about if the sequence of reveals at the end makes sense, a”

“I’m looking to pay someone experienced for feedback on a feature script. My issue with a lot of coverage services is that you don’t really know who’s reading your script. I’d rather find someone where I can actually see their credits/background and know whether they’re someone I want feedback from. Has anyone had good experiences with services where you can choose the reader? Or just hiring screenwriters, producers, development people, etc. directly? Mostly looking for good developmental feedbac”

“So, I am going to be writing a comedy screenplay, very much inspired by....not really sure what to call them but...absurd slice of life comedies? I'd compare the overall tone to Don't be a Menace while Drinking your Juice in the Hood and Not Another Teen Movie, though it isn't a parody movie, maybe. I THINK I want it to be set in a Hotel and I THINK it want it to be a parody of the White Lotus? But like, the same way Shaun of the Dead is a “parody” of Zombie Movies. A big thing I do”

“Everything is finished. The screenplay (dual language KR & EN, synopsis, reasoning, presentation slide deck, scene list, glossary etc. submitted by /u/VonDerBerg [link] [comments]”

“I tried the free-text search with “A tense mystery film under two hours, but not horror.” The flow correctly inferred mystery/dark/high intensity and jumped me to screen 5 of the film flow, so it felt responsive rather than making me repeat everything. The main issue was that the summary dropped the two constraints I cared about most: under two hours and not horror. I couldn’t tell whether they had been understood. I’d show a small “constraints understood” row—runtime under 2h; exclude horror—an”

“I recently went through a big rewrite for this project. Let me know what you think! I appreciate that some of you have already read this script. Really hoping to get a reader with fresh eyes. Title: Never Shall Do Harm To Me Format: Feature Page length: 106 Genre: American Gothic Horror Logline: When ten-year-old Jessie and her broken father retreat to his crumbling childhood home in rural Vermont, her estranged uncle teaches her an old family ritual to quiet the monsters in the walls. But when”

“Title: Let Down Total Pages: 3 Genre: Drama Logline: Worn down by his daily routine and the world, a young man heads out into the night. Link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1gVqgTMFetMENt3q5ycwjUCxHcnufmyQJ/view As the titles suggests Radiohead's Let Down is the inspiration behind the short. submitted by /u/No-Chemistry1722 [link] [comments]”

“I’m planning to write a feature length screenplay soon and when I do eventually write it where would the best place to share it with others? submitted by /u/TheAverage_gamer08 [link] [comments]”

“FAQ: How to post to a weekly thread? Feedback Guide for New Writers This is a thread for giving and receiving feedback on 5 of your screenplay pages. Post a link to five pages of your screenplay in a top comment. They can be any 5, but if they are not your first 5, give some context in the same comment you're linking in. As a courtesy, you can also include some of this info. Title: Format: Page Length: Genres: Logline or Summary: Feedback Concerns: Provide feedback in reply-comments. Please”

“I hit a wall like never before. Genuinely can't finish this script because I'm just not getting any good ideas. How would you approach a situation like this? submitted by /u/MazterCowzChaoz [link] [comments]”

“i wrote this fan script from arcane series took me about an hour to make let me know what i can improve open to critque https://drive.google.com/file/d/1SbO-L5f2FH6PIjWwyeznI74HZnY94Z9R/view?usp=sharing Title: Arcane fan cont. Pawnshop | Genre: Fanfiction / Sci-Fi (Steampunk) / Action | Page Count: 4 submitted by /u/Zyfence [link] [comments]”

“Honestly, I don't have any interest in money. I would really consider "successful" being just creating a community and having fun. The script is more just for the hard facts and the rundown of the plot of the comicbooks. Really just the stuff I don't know off the top of my head.”

“Hey, i am new in this reddit and generally in this community, i started writing less than one month ago and i am trying to learn. Does anyone know how can i read a BlackList script? I want to find one. Thank you in advance submitted by /u/Prestigious_Dog_124 [link] [comments]”

“Hi all, I would appreciate feedback for my short, science fiction script, 5 pages. I will be shooting in one month. https://drive.google.com/file/d/1ZGKpk0tGKA8F1KOATHdWrQDuouJ5X3QW/view?usp=drive_link Title: The Human Preservation Project Genre: Sci Fi Happy to read/view any shorts in exchange. Thank you! submitted by /u/anokhsingh8 [link] [comments]”

“FAQ: How to post to a weekly thread? Feedback Guide for New Writers This is a thread for giving and receiving feedback on 5 of your screenplay pages. Post a link to five pages of your screenplay in a top comment. They can be any 5, but if they are not your first 5, give some context in the same comment you're linking in. As a courtesy, you can also include some of this info. Title: Format: Page Length: Genres: Logline or Summary: Feedback Concerns: Provide feedback in reply-comments. Please”

“I need help with a script on cyber bullying , i have a basic frame work ready just need some original opinions like hate comments , strong slogan for conclusion , any and every ideas are welcomed , please help !! submitted by /u/potatohead_airbag [link] [comments]”

“Hey everyone, I’ve just finished working on a new draft of a supernatural horror/dramedy pilot called The Department, and I’d love an outside perspective on it. The basic premise: In a small town, hauntings aren’t treated as paranormal mysteries anymore. They’re municipal problems. It’s like Ghostbusters meets Parks and Rec meets Stephen King. I’m especially looking for feedback on: The world. Does The Department feel believable and lived-in? Does Leland work as a protagonist? Is the balance bet”

“Hello, I'm 15M and this is my first short film script for practicing being a writer-director. I wrote it in 7days after erasing the original concept, but I feel like it a pretty solid start. It's wayyy over my budget anyways lol, but it was just something unique I thought up while watching a tiktok. I wanted something with a theme/message people on social media (specifically tiktok) could recognize, but also real characters, but I fell flat. But anyways, thanks for reading (even if it wa”

“I’m a new writer and I’m still in the early idea stage, so I’d appreciate some honest feedback before I start developing this further. The basic idea: A completely ordinary, lonely guy becomes obsessed with Mafia movies and TV shows,especially The Godfather, Goodfellas, and The Sopranos. He starts believing that becoming a “made man” will give his boring life what it's missing: respect, purpose, confidence, brotherhood, and excitement. The problem is that he knows absolutely nothing about th”

“Looking for feedback on my first short film screenplay. Title: Gumbo Format: Short Length: 18 Pages Genre: Slice of Life Feedback Concerns: Formatting, Whether there is enough story. Logline: A rural town in Korea is upended when a stranger opens a cafe that serves a strange food no one there has seen before. Google drive link submitted by /u/SockBramson [link] [comments]”

“Hi I've attempted to write 2 pages of dialogue for the first time. My background is only in acting. I have never written anything before so bare with me. I'm just trying to identify if i have "it" to explore writing Would appreciate any feedback. Thanks https://docs.google.com/document/u/7/d/1EBHRZgcz1lZiXN1Yy-pm4FwCqlTv\_IJm/mobilebasic submitted by /u/AccomplishedBad7871 [link] [comments]”

“FAQ: How to post to a weekly thread? Feedback Guide for New Writers Post your script swap requests here! Alternately, if you are on storypeer.com - call out your script by name so people can search for it. Please do not identify yourself publicly if you claim a script on storypeer, but follow the "open to contact" rules . NOTE: Please refrain from upvoting or downvoting — just respond to scripts you’d like to exchange or read. How to Swap If you want to offer your script for a swap , p”

“Hello! My brother and I just finished the fourth draft of our comedy screenplay that we intend to develop into a short film, TWINS! It's a comedy inspired by I Think You Should Leave and our own experience as twins in high school. The hard thing about writing comedy is that when you've been in the trenches of drafting over and over again while also working on characters and story, none of it feels funny anymore, so we want to get it in front of a cold audience to see if the comedy lands”

“Would love some help in getting this (very rough) first draft to a really strong place. I feel like there needs to be an added element of sauce, but I don’t know what that is. Thanks! PS. This can and will be a bit longer, currently at 10 pages but aim to be 12-15 https://drive.google.com/file/d/1fO8Y8GVPcnyPUAlwGt3HxFSq5QRzvz7N/view?usp=drivesdk submitted by /u/lwa06 [link] [comments]”

“FAQ: How to post to a weekly thread? Feedback Guide for New Writers This is a thread for giving and receiving feedback on 5 of your screenplay pages. Post a link to five pages of your screenplay in a top comment. They can be any 5, but if they are not your first 5, give some context in the same comment you're linking in. As a courtesy, you can also include some of this info. Title: Format: Page Length: Genres: Logline or Summary: Feedback Concerns: Provide feedback in reply-comments. Please”

“I'm posting a new draft of my script! Last time, I got some really amazing feedback and I've spent the last few months revising and editing this script. I think it's in a much stronger place now, and now it's time to turn it back to peer feedback. Title: Clouds Over Heaven Format: Feature Page Count: 116 Genres: Western/Thriller Logline: After a chemical train derailment kills his wife and daughter, a grieving construction worker meets a strange woman at a casino bar who asks wha”

“Hello, I recently completed my 10th feature screenplay, a 9 page psychological horror film. I shot the film on a $27 budget and have released it. Would love to hear any hostile or brutal criticism. Not a request for feedback, seeking formal critical engagement on my choices as a filmmaker/writer. Animal Trap Script Animal Trap Feature Film (Found Footage Horror) If you have a chance, feel free to review on IMDb. submitted by /u/Flamevian [link] [comments]”

“Hi everyone! I’m so excited to say I’ve finally finished writing my first screenplay, KEEP THE DOCTOR AWAY. Genre: Drama Thriller Logline: An anonymous graffiti artist smokes weed from an apple and has a premonition of a wildfire that will destroy Los Angeles and take her life on her golden birthday—if she doesn’t become famous enough for the city to take her seriously. Page Count: 109 I’ve had this idea for a few months, initially starting it as a speculative fiction novel, then coming to the r”

“Script (TLDR) It basically follows these three guys who will help Issa try to ask a girl out to an upcoming dance, where the ways will get more bizarre after the last one doesn’t work, and I’ve considered adding a pretty sad, contrasting ending. It’s more of a buddy comedy than a romcom. If you want the character archetypes: Issa is the overthinker, Zayne is the more emotionally understanding, and Faisal is the dumb one. (sorry if it seems vague. I don’t usually describe my characters using arch”

“I’m not a very experienced writer, but I do it a lot as a hobby. I have a screenplay I’m very confident in, but don’t know how to get it out there. Any tips?? submitted by /u/Butteryhams [link] [comments]”

“FAQ: How to post to a weekly thread? Feedback Guide for New Writers Post your script swap requests here! Alternately, if you are on storypeer.com - call out your script by name so people can search for it. Please do not identify yourself publicly if you claim a script on storypeer, but follow the "open to contact" rules . NOTE: Please refrain from upvoting or downvoting — just respond to scripts you’d like to exchange or read. How to Swap If you want to offer your script for a swap , p”

“Title: The Way In Format: Short Film Page Length: 27 pages Draft Status: Completed revised draft Genre: Drama / Comedic Tragedy Logline: The day before her big break, a guarded New York DJ's conspiracy-minded father arrives unannounced with pancreatic cancer. When he steals her medication, their confrontation leads them somewhere neither of them understands. Script: Link Concerns: Mainly looking for thoughts on pacing, the father-daughter dynamic, dialogue, and whether the shift into the end”

I'm looking for feedback from the first twenty pages of the script I've written so far. Here's the Link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/13pKrRkqCIX1ttkD_eDJrQQj0c78BV5Xb/view?usp=sharing Anyway heres the stuff Im supposed to put in it: Its called…

“Looking for feedback on the first 5 pages of my spec script for my dark comedy pilot PARDON OUR MESS. The logline: When his longtime therapist refers him out, a gay construction foreman with dissociative identity disorder has to manage his crew, his best friend, and a hookup who wants more — while sharing a body with a homophobic alter. https://drive.google.com/file/d/1ydo4E44VxhVPrRjSoTf38S6bbHjz-isB/view?usp=drivesdk submitted by /u/Halfnhalf2_81 [link] [comments]”

“Hey everyone, I'm working on a slow cinema style script very minimal dialogue, long static shots, tension built through silence and body language Right now I have the first 3 pages + final scene written. It's about two Korean immigrants in Italy driving to an isolated canyon almost no dialogue My logline (still rough) Two Korean immigrants on a silent road trip through the mountains confront the unspoken rift between them without saying a word I'd love to: Discuss craft how do you wr”

“FAQ: How to post to a weekly thread? Feedback Guide for New Writers This is a thread for giving and receiving feedback on 5 of your screenplay pages. Post a link to five pages of your screenplay in a top comment. They can be any 5, but if they are not your first 5, give some context in the same comment you're linking in. As a courtesy, you can also include some of this info. Title: Format: Page Length: Genres: Logline or Summary: Feedback Concerns: Provide feedback in reply-comments. Please”

“I know there's nothing wrong with this, if I'm conveying character, showing funny, painful stuff (it's a comedy) that led us to now, and "Establishing the Wound." Some of the best movies ever have done this. Shawshank, Goodfellas. But something is nagging at me, that it's wrong, or too easy or simply "been done." It just seems to be the best way to convey the 6 years of heartbreaking futility my protagonist and his squad have experienced up until now. I'm”

“A nepo-baby house-sitting his father’s Hollywood mansion discovers four naked women keep appearing in the pool. Think: Barbarian meets Ready or Not rich-kid rot. Link to Script: Here Hey everyone! Just trying to get my feet wet with this one. Feedback is incredibly welcome. Would love to get any ideas on how to strengthen things. Thank you! submitted by /u/SKANTOWN__WHAT [link] [comments]”

“I’m a newbie with this, so bare with me. I’ve written a 20-page short film, and I’ve self-funded 2/3 of the budget. But I now have a Kickstarter that is live to help fund the last 1/3. I posted my Kickstarter to a local film community on Facebook and someone reached out to me looking to invest into the higher-costing tiers, but wanted some more info. I looked them up, and the info they provided me about them checks out. So I don’t think it’s a scam (they’re not like the spam messages I’ve been g”

“I've been writing screenplays for years, and I'm trying something different: posting an original thriller one episode at a time. Each episode will be around 2–3 pages, and I'll continue the story based on where the mystery takes us. Here's Episode 1&2. THE VOICE NOTE EPISODE 1 — "11 Seconds" INT. AARAV'S BEDROOM — NIGHT 2:17 A.M. Darkness, broken only by the pale glow of a phone screen resting face-down on the nightstand. AARAV (28) lies on top of the covers, st”

“After writing two novels, I decided to give screenwriting a go. Totally new to this format so I thought about submitting a pilot to the Austin Film Festival, but the deadline was getting tight. When I found their consulting program , I thought it would be better to wait until the festival work dies down so I can get a good read and solid feedback. Does anyone have experience with this program? Are there other ways to get feedback from people in the business? submitted by /u/AnnatheNo”

“Wrote this 30 page short film in 3 days, a 30 page satire on the looked down upon world of door to door sales, based off my own personal experience in the industry. This, in my opinion is one my best written work. The script has been test marketed on friends and proofread by AI, all grammatic errors should be fixed. Let me know your honest thoughts. Title: Solicitor Format: Short Film Page length: 30 Pages Genres: Satire/Black Comedy Logline: A young, hungry sales rep must make his first sale—or”