Screenwriters Want Feedback on Short Scripts
16 posts across 2 communities in the last 60 days; 94% from r/Screenwriting.
“Been working away at this one for a while. Pretty happy with what I have, but nothing is ever finished! It's fairly unconventional so want to make sure the ideas/spatial aspects are coming across clearly. Title: For Safety Format: Short Film Page Length: 12 pgs. Genre: Comedy…”
“https://drive.google.com/file/d/17_eVTAdY0cm_tx508Vut_MqrWot0QVbW/view?usp=sharing My first attempt at a short film, always looking to improve, specifically with dialogue, so any critiques would be welcome!”
“Hi everyone. I'm in need of some feedback for my short film script that I will be submitting to the No Drama/Monkeypaw horror grant. The competition was announced out of nowhere and I heard about it a little late. I decided to take the feature I'm working on and write the proof…”
Several screenwriters are sharing early drafts of their short scripts and specifically asking for feedback. They want to know if the initial pages are compelling and engaging.
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“Good day, all I am seeking feedback on my short script, details below. Title: Chemical-free Pages: Eight Format: Short script Genres: Drama, horror Logline: Under pressure to develop a faster-acting pesticide, a troubled researcher abandons his principles and begins conducting increasingly disturbing experiments. But just…”
“Been working away at this one for a while. Pretty happy with what I have, but nothing is ever finished! It's fairly unconventional so want to make sure the ideas/spatial aspects are coming across clearly. Title: For Safety Format: Short Film Page Length: 12 pgs. Genre: Comedy Logline: When an actress’s chaotic but scripted walk-of-shame appears to derail into a very real public meltdown, the cast and crew scramble to get her back on script. https://drive.google.com/file/d/1uZTb7MbTt6gYODTNcE”
“https://drive.google.com/file/d/17_eVTAdY0cm_tx508Vut_MqrWot0QVbW/view?usp=sharing My first attempt at a short film, always looking to improve, specifically with dialogue, so any critiques would be welcome! submitted by /u/ELOCHCAM [link] [comments]”
“Hi everyone. I'm in need of some feedback for my short film script that I will be submitting to the No Drama/Monkeypaw horror grant. The competition was announced out of nowhere and I heard about it a little late. I decided to take the feature I'm working on and write the proof of concept. So, this is a first draft. The deadline is tomorrow so I'm kind of pressed for time. Just wanted to see if I can get a last minute opinion. I'm just coming out of a year long creative block and”
“This is my second script. It’s not even close to finished but let me know if people have any feedback of what I’ve written so far. https://drive.google.com/file/d/1pne2Y1Gi2jp64ZVo0Wxld-agvNTUrO1D/view?usp=drivesdk Title: The Damned Format: Feature Film Page Length: 5 pages Draft: Early Genre: Horror, comedy Feedback concerns: N/A- most of script will take place in an abandoned asylum and a haunted half abandoned town based on one I know from growing up submitted by /u/RogueKnight77”
“Man Up Short film 15 pages Drama Logline: A man who fakes happiness for a living risks showing his true face, and losing it. I have revised, rewritten and edited as much as I can. Looking for a fresh pair of eyes. Looking to get it in to production for submission totals. https://drive.google.com/file/d/18CzTInD5fTpH2RaNNRus2BahfXLoRXwU/view?usp=drivesdk submitted by /u/One_Take_Trasolini [link] [comments]”
“Title: I QUIT Format: Short Page Length: 5 Pages Genres: Drama/Comedy/ Magic Realism Logline: A man wants to quit his job, but his boss wants him to stay. Feedback: This is my first time writing a screenplay, would appreciate your feedback on how to structure this better, add/remove certain element and make the ending better. Link: I QUIT submitted by /u/No_heartanxiety [link] [comments]”
“Title: Clara and Charlie Format: Short Chamber Drama Pages: 4 Genre: Drama Logline: When a tired and frantic young woman looks to escape her chaotic upbringing by entering a convent, she becomes trapped in an elevator with her apathetic, slacker older brother. Feedback Concerns: Does the argument between the two siblings hold solid weight? Does the ending feel earned and mature? Does the comment about Charlie's abuse issues land or feel like a bit much? Script: Link Context: After a year off”
“Hey everyone, I wrote this script for my final project for film school. I originally planned on doing a more grandiose idea with more elements, but after learning about the 5-8 minute time constraint, I decided to peel it back and do a much smaller idea that I think I could execute well. Title: The Group Chat Format: Short Film Page Length: 7 pgs. Genre: Comedy, Drama Logline: A young man spirals after discovering his friends have a secret group chat without him. https://drive.google.com/file/d/”
“Hi, If anyone would like to read my comedy feature script We’re Cops!, or just a few pages, it would be a good way to learn. Looking for feedback or just any comments of any parts of it. It’s a buddy-cop comedy set in the underbelly of Hollywood. The humour is sometimes dark and sardonic and the writing style probably too cold, something that needs work. I realize reading someone else’s work is a big task and I am of course grateful for whatever effort is made. I cut a racist and inappropriate j”
“Title: The Rider Format: Pilot Episode Draft Page Length: 11 Pages (Including Title Page) (Work in Progress) Genres: Drama/Black-Comedy Logline/Summary: In 1970s California, an aspiring rockstar spends his nights as a 'Specialist Runner' for a boutique agency, navigating the debauched and dangerous whims of the music industry’s elite. All while navigating a tense relationship with a scheming client who holds both his and his band’s future in the balance. Feedback Concerns: Looking for fe”
“Looking for feedback for my short I’m trying to pitch in class mainly as to how the story feels. Thank you in advance. https://drive.google.com/file/d/1tuSepsNpLR23fiYZpTrnQDiGqdTwZhZu/view?usp=drivesdk Drama It’s a courtroom trial over a murder a woman was suspected of commiting Characters: Elle Annie Jack Rachel Robert Finch Natalie Morton The Judge submitted by /u/TOMMYMILLEROK [link] [comments]”
“Logline: A humble motel owner's world that contains a spirit from another dimension, a maybe-pimp, and a silent sweet old grandma, is rocked when a mysterious drifter books a room in his motel, bringing chaos into the mix. https://drive.google.com/file/d/1sAwhTXBD4mmNZYUF77ZqsAPw8_PeLu5l/view?usp=sharing I wrote this as a pilot but I think it's also self-contained enough to work as a short. Let me know what y'all think. Whether you like it or don't like it or maybe something in b”
Title: Hack Format: Short Length: 7 pages Genre: Black Comedy Logline: An actor grows increasingly anxious after an audition. I posted this short a while back, but I made some edits that…
“Logline: On his last night in L.A., a dejected screenwriter takes an inspirational road trip to "Back to the Future" filming locations with three newfound friends who just arrived in town. Comedy/drama Looking for general feedback on structure and dialogue. Much appreciated. https://drive.google.com/file/d/17oqpG85pYG0KroQcY4W5yekQ3zQ6wWV2/view?usp=sharing submitted by /u/WheatThin100 [link] [comments]”
“TITLE: Spam Call (2ND DRAFT) FORMAT: Short Film/Sketch GENRE: Comedy LENGTH: 6 1/2 pages PLOT: A man's most important life moments are constantly interrupted by irritating spam calls from telemarketers. Hey guys, A while back I posted the first draft of a comedy script I wrote about a guy whose life gets interrupted at inopportune times by phone calls from a pushy and persuasive telemarketer. I finished a rewrite of it and I'd love to get your thoughts/suggestions on what works and what”
“Mainly looking for feedback relating to the story and how it reads for you guys as I am pitching this in my class and I really want to direct. submitted by /u/TOMMYMILLEROK [link] [comments]”
“Title: Rage Format: Short Film Page Length: 30 pages Draft Status: Completed Genre: Psychological Logline: Trapped reliving the same college party every time a certain partygoer is murdered, a reluctant student is determined to break the cycle, but things get complicated when the victim himself seems to be having all the fun. https://drive.google.com/file/d/1cJHRpwS9K2PzCie6-ChUey5K48CmJQjr/view?usp=sharing Concerns: I mostly just want whatever feedback I can get on this, but I have some small,”
“Mine, shortfilm 1 hour, feature film script 17 hours submitted by /u/filmconart [link] [comments]”
“Title: THE CUCKOLD Format: Short Page Length: 7 Genres: Horror Logline or Summary: An ex-tailor couldn't take it anymore and after a rough day sews his prostitute wife to himself. Feedback Concerns: I'd like to get a feedback on wheter Sam is motivated enough to kill his wife. I aimed to have the reader/audience take pity on the Sam and at the end feel disturbed. Does the script achive that? Does the pace of the script feel slow or fast? Do the scenes feel disconnected? Any parts of the”
“Here is my screenplay - https://drive.google.com/file/d/1UeBrVShBiOJkIA11bkVarLiKeuuYqiAR/view?usp=sharing It's my first ever screenplay and I am self taught filmmaker, So I've read 1 or 2 screenplays such as from Marty Supreme and Barbie. Then I wanted to write one for me which is a blend of the horror and mystery genres , and I want to know if they were executed well in this screenplay. I want to know these addition stuff too. When Where and How (how should I show then on my screenplay”
This is my first ever time writing a screenplay, I am going to shoot it with my friends and I am a huge fan of the horror and mystery genre, so I…
“Please give me feedback my first ever screenplay. I wrote in about an hour and a half and it's short but I just wanna know what you guys think of it. Please be honest with any critiques and anything you liked. Thanks. Title: THE VAULT Format: Short Film Page Length: 11 Genres: Psychological Thriller Logline: Two guards struggle to escape their past and present as the irresistible temptation of what's inside a mysterious vault threatens to break them. Feedback concerns: Pacing & Tensi”
“Looking to direct in my next class so I want to make sure this can be as good as possible. I know formatting will need work but if I can just get opinions on how the story is. submitted by /u/TOMMYMILLEROK [link] [comments]”
“Thought I'd share the first act of my new feature script. Read it as far as you enjoy! https://drive.google.com/file/d/1PmJ-JrdyZDxryyeSR1jy6DMBJUqoHi2o/view ANY feedback is appreciated. Logline: When the long-serving mayor of a small Pennsylvania town drops dead two days before his re-election campaign, his estranged daughter is asked to take his place, but she soon realizes, that performances, like politics and grief, come at a price. Genre(s): drama, dark-comedy submitted by /”
“FAQ: How to post to a weekly thread? Feedback Guide for New Writers This is a thread for giving and receiving feedback on 5 of your screenplay pages. Post a link to five pages of your screenplay in a top comment. They can be any 5, but if they are not your first 5, give some context in the same comment you're linking in. As a courtesy, you can also include some of this info. Title: Format: Page Length: Genres: Logline or Summary: Feedback Concerns: Provide feedback in reply-comments. Please”
“Down below is a link for the first 12 of 93 pages to my feature-length drama. I Tried to have fun with writing a drama in a single setting. Let me know if this is a good start! PDF submitted by /u/a830resatdorsia [link] [comments]”
“Title: Marching on Rocky Roads Format: Short Page Length: 5 Genres: No dialogue Logline or Summary: A one-armed military veteran tries to reconnect with his sense of identity by going on a ruck march. Feedback Concerns: All welcomed Link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1xam-mNwbrygRzqFZ95aAWBScgf7sTwX1/view?usp=sharing submitted by /u/Remarkable-Lecture54 [link] [comments]”
“Title: El Bacá Format: Short Page Length: 15 Pages Genres: Folklore Horror/Drama Logline: After his father's death, a young Dominican farmer inherits an unexpected burden that challenges his understanding of family, faith, and legacy. Feedback Concerns: Is this short compelling on its own? Link⬇️ https://drive.google.com/file/d/1A0DijBos7qoEJVneh2jYyxa7yqDs_qog/view?usp=sharing submitted by /u/Remarkable-Lecture54 [link] [comments]”